A lot of collectors swear by the Lexol cleaner. It is hard to tell from the picture what the color is supposed to be. I see the pinky finger being lighter in color and maybe that is the cleaned area. It looks good to me. The only suggestion I could make is not to scrub too hard at first but take it in stages. The cleaned leather seems smooth and that is how you want it. Sometimes a glove can look scoured and the nap of the leather is raised and that is taking it too far. Lexol also makes a conditioner that is used by collectors after cleaning. You are starting with a medium brown leather as far as I can tell and I like to work toward evenness of color over the whole glove. I go over the whole glove lightly at first to see what I have as far as ease of cleaning and any problem areas.
The lacing can be brittle and often breaks especially in the web. When cleaning a web, I support it underneath with a towel. I have broken a lot of laces in cleaning but I have found that trying to remove the laces can also break them. I collect old beater gloves off ebay and take them apart for the lacing. If you post a pic of the web lacing, I can look at the color and send you a length of old lacing in the mail to repair it. a broken lace is not a big deal and a replacement lace doesn't affect the value of your glove.
I think the glove looks great. I like that the cloth patch looks cleaner. That can be tricky because they are fragile. If you want to PM me you can click on my user name and send me your address and I will send out a length of lace for the web.
Here is a way I lace a tunnel web. The leather on this glove was pretty stiff and I guarantee that using a straight needle could weaken and possibly damage the leather around the grommets. I used a paper clip for the needle and crimped it around the end of the lacing. I curved the wire to easily fit through the two grommet and carefully pulled it through with pliers. I straightened the wire and fed it through the leather tunnel and pulled the lacing through.